本文是做者地点壆校舉止“三峽情”英語演講競賽中獲两等獎的一篇演講稿。文中描写跟議論得體，詞匯也用得較為豐富，只是某些句子結搆過於復雜，能够會給聽眾懂得帶來困難。某些語行上的不敷之處點評修正以下：
(1)改為不定式表现目标較好。
(2)這裏應該用主動語態。 Boys and girls,
The Three Gorges area,on the Changjiang River,stretched from Fengjie of Sichuan Province east to Yichang of Hubei Province, a total of 193 km. The Qutang Gorge is from Baidicheng to Daxi Brook, the Wu Gorge is from the Wu Mountain to Badong, and the Xiling Gorge, from Zigui to Nanjinguan Pass. The voyage through the Three Gorges is an unforgettable experience. The river winds its way through countless valleys, around steep peaks,over crucial rapids and whirlpools,like a picturesque corridor(畫廊), presenting changing scenery all the way.
Whether in the past or at present, at home or abroad, tourists take pride in paying a visit to them,poets write poems and songs about them, and artists paint them in pictures.Libai, a famous poet of Tang Dynasty, described the scene as follows： While the monkeys on both banks are still gibbering in your ears, away has the boat flown past tens of thousands of hills. He said so showing [to show](1)how powerful and rapid the currents are! Actually it sometimes takes hours for a boat to round a turn in the cliffs so sharp that one can see no opening for the river course, and that one has little sun on his way through the gorges.
The old gorges have taken on a new look. Navigation (飞行)through the Changjiang Gorges has been enormously improved since the liberation, 1949. You can see different kinds of ships, such as steamships, sailing boats, tugs, barges, life boats and airships, sailing up and down the gorges. From time to time, handsome modern passenger ships, painted white or some other colour, with wonderful superstructure, fitted with all sorts of up-to-date equipment like searchlights, radar, depth indicator, 1400-horsepower twin diesel engines, and radio telephones between ship and shore and between ships, can be seen, carrying about 1 500 passengers safely to different parts of the country. Passengers can see live television in the air-conditioned cabins during their voyage. Along the banks, green woods, yellow and sweet citrus (柑桔) orchards and fertile fields have taken the place of sheer, bare rock walls. Fast-developing cities, such as Wanxian, Yichang , Shashi , are dotted on [dot] (2) the old lonely gorge banks.
Above all , a plan to build a dam at Three Gorges was proposed in the Ten Year Development Plan of the 1992 National People's Congress. The project will serve several purposes, including flood control, power production and navigation. It is not only an extremely huge project, but also a great cause which benefits future generations.
Mother gave birth to me in the Three Gorges area 17 years ago. I feel proud of being a native of the Three Gorges.I'm lucky to be living not only at such a golden time, but also in the gorge area.I've made up my mind to devote myself to the building of the great reservoir with determination,courage and ardor.
Thank you for your attention.
四省萬縣市實驗張艷
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